Category Archives: BENEATH THE SURFACE (Fiction)

Commuter Horror Story


(Fictional Story)

As the group of scared and confused passengers look up at the small opening of the large rubble piled in front of them, without a word being spoken each one of them had the same thought of what is on the other side.  Witnessing a person falling to their death was utterly overwhelming for some, but sparked determination for answers in others.  Almost immediately, two more men began to climb the pile of rubble with great caution as they had no idea what to expect once they reached the top.  Other commuters on the ground watch with much nervousness as they observe the two brave men climbing the same pile that the last passenger fell down and ended his life.  Just as the one of them reach the small opening at the top, the commuter slowly peeps his head up to the hole to see what is on the other side.  At first he sees nothing but darkness, but as he reaches his head further into the hole, he could see the emergency lights flickering on and off with no evidence of anyone around.

One elderly woman yelled out to the men on the top of the pile, “What do you see!? You see anything?”  The male commuter peeping through the hole slowly turns around to be careful not to fall and yells back, “All I see are the emergency lights flickering on and off!  I don’t see anything that remotely looks freaky or scary!”  As he turns back around to take one final peep through the hole, the other male commuter that was just feet below him looks up and sees his climbing buddy quickly turn to stone.  Witnessing this with his own eyes made him think that he was not seeing what he thought he was seeing, however, within seconds the male commuter was completely turned to stone and became part of the stone pile.  The other passengers that had good enough eye sight in the low light scene, looked in horror as they also witnessed the whole transformation of the male passenger turning to stone.  Many female onlookers placed their hands over their mouths in disbelief as others began to shed tears from fear and horror.

As the second male passenger quickly, but cautiously descend down the pile of rubble as other commuters rush to meet him at the bottom.  Jumping over debris and the railroad tracks, the man finally reaches the bottom and gets grabbed and pulled away from the pile.  Still in disbelief of what happened they all look at each other in confusion and fear and not sure of what to make of the situation.  The only elderly lady in the group, who also can’t see very well, starts to ask questions to others that would pay attention to her about the other man still stuck at the top.  Finally one person speaks to her in a firm and loud voice telling her that the other man has just turned to stone, and we are not sure what he saw or experienced.  The news just sends frightening chills down her brittle spine and physically makes her arms and hands shake.  When someone turns around and sees her in shock and struggling to settle in with the situation, a couple of people rush to her aid.  She collapses near the third rail and suddenly stops shivering and shaking with her mouth wide open and eyes staring out into space.  When the helpers reached her and checked her pulse, it was too late as it was clear she suffered a heart attack and died.

Two deaths in the span of a few minutes were very alarming to some, which generated some thoughts amongst the passengers of their own fate.  Just as it couldn’t get any worse for them the ground beneath them started to shake as an earthquake was happening.  With no cover to hide underneath, every single passenger went dodging back into the crumpled up train cars to hide from any debris that may come crashing down.  It was quick thinking for the commuters to do so when more of the concrete ceiling came crashing down on top of the train cars.  Few heavy boulders came crashing through the train windows, shattering glass everywhere and even caused some of the passengers to get cut by them.  The loud noises of the ground shaking and boulders pounding on the outside of the train cars struck fear and had everyone thinking that this is the way they would probably die.  Even the pile of rubble where the passenger was frozen in stone came crashing down as well and with such force as to shift and move a few of the train cars.  As the train cars shift from their previous position, anyone inside was tossed around striking any fixed object causing serious injuries.

Which seemed like an eternity to those going through it, the noise and shaking suddenly stopped and all became very quiet.  For the next several minutes everyone is trying to regain themselves and treat their wounds the best way they can.  Two of the passengers suffered concussions and were in deep comas and that no one present could help them.  One of the commuters made their way outside of the train through a shattered window and noticed that nothing but concrete debris surrounds them, but noticed one major difference.  He looked in the direction of where the pile of debris used to be and could see through a much larger hole the other set of tracks.  However, the tracks lead completely into darkness and where they are currently only one emergency light is still on.  Soon all other passengers began to make their way out of the toppled and crippled trains, but had to leave the other two behind.  With no medical intervention near them or within grasp, the two that laid in deep comas were positioned in a safe place.  A note was left behind for them in case they wake up and can follow directions to safety.  One by one each passenger help each other navigate through the fallen debris and through the large hole on the other set of tracks.  Once everyone was safely over the debris and gathered on the new set of tracks, they began walking down the tracks entering the darkness seeking help.

Henry Scott


(Fictional Story)

A typical day in the Nation’s Capital speaks of heavy volume during the morning rush hours, with thousands of commuters both pedestrians and vehicular traffic. On this warm summer day, just 48 hours after the nation celebrated its birthday, everyone goes on about their daily lives as if no holiday has recently occurred. On this particular day the subway system was having track maintenance, which caused a few lines to single track and experiences a much heavier load of passengers than normal. On one subway line, the Purple Line, which just came into existence a few months ago, already seems to push its limits on boarding commuters. This interrupted delay may many people late for work and caused many to stay home and telecommute into their workspace.

It seemed all at once hundreds of commuters rushed down the escalators, which were surprisingly flawless in operation, to catch the current train that pulled into the underground station. As the doors opened many passengers were exiting the train as commuters were attempting to board. Quickly this caused a few tensions to rise and physical altercations almost broke out between the two sets of people. The train conductor saw the commotion outside of the train on the platform and quickly made an announcement to have people disperse and go their respective ways. It just so happened that the transit police was in the area to separate many passengers and decided who stayed and who boarded. Once the commotions were squashed and dealt with, the train slowly continued down the tracks to its next station.

The approximate time between stations was five minutes usually, but with trains sharing tracks it added an extra two minutes to the ride. While the train was moving towards the next station, many passengers were forced to stand and grab on to the silver poles that protruded from the floor to the ceiling, and ran along the top of the car. Since every seat was basically taken some of the handicap passengers either had to brave out the ride standing up, or plead with some to exchange for a seat. Although it is the policy to give up your seat to anyone who displays a handicap need for it, many refused and a few violent verbal exchanges were heard throughout certain cars. Halfway through the tunnel the conductor made another announcement that they would be stopping and allow two trains to bypass them once they leave the station. This caused many people to murmur under their breath, which oddly started conversations between strangers.

A few minutes passed and just as the conductor was making his announcement, a loud explosion occurred and a heavy rumble was felt throughout the train. All the lights in every car began to flicker violently as the train rocked back and forth. People started screaming and yelling to each other wondering what was happening, but that quickly turned to survival. A couple more loud explosions rumbled above and caused the tunnel and the train to continue to shake violently. Soon the train separated from the tracks and began to tip sideways as many passengers held on for dear life. It felt like eternity for some as some people couldn’t hold on and maintain their balance, falling to the side of the train tipping over. Several passengers were crushed by falling debris coming from above through the roof of the train, and others landing on top of them. People were pinned between the windows and the pile of passengers causing them to either suffocate or suffer serious injury.

All the lights went out and all people could hear were each other screaming and glass shattering around them. Many people suffered lacerations across the face and to their limbs during this violent encounter. Both ends of the tunnel crumbled trapping them on the small portion of the track they occupied, cutting them off from everyone else. Which seemed like forever, the shaking and the falling passengers suddenly stopped, and an eerie silence fell amongst the scene. Once some figured it was safe enough to start moving, they started checking on each other and attending to those that were underneath the pile of scared commuters. Slowly people started to scatter around the train carefully not to step on people who are still trying to gather themselves. For several minutes people started yelling to other cars to take tally on how many injured and how many dead. The tally came to about a dozen dead and hundreds wounded ranging from severe lacerations to compound fractures. On each car the wounded were moved to a safe part of the train as the deceased were moved to another part of the train.

Finally, some passengers were able to break through the windows that were above them and exit. People had to use their cell phones to get a hint of where they were walking and who was where. All those that exited the train met up with each other as some volunteered to stay behind with the wounded and dead. The passengers in the front car immediately checked on the driver, but quickly found out that she was deceased as well. As some of the passengers attempt to make sense of what happened, others struggled to calm down some who started to panic and speak of unthinkable terms. A few passengers teamed up to walk towards the front of the train, careful not to touch the third rail, and could see approximately a hundred feet in front of them where the tunnel collapsed. Almost immediately several passengers rushed towards the mountain of rubble and started to move away the boulder-like debris. All this was done within a matter of several minutes, which one passenger standing on the track behind the process pointed up. All those that were helping looked up and could see a possible breakthrough into the other side of the tunnel. A couple of passengers carefully climbed up the unstable pile to peek through to see what they can see.

One male passenger got to the top of and was able to see the emergency lights from the next station reflect off the tunnel walls. As he was getting questions of what he could see and before he could answer, a shadow figure displayed itself on the other side of the opening expelling a heart stopping growl. This terrified the man and caused him to fall backwards on the sharp edged boulders beneath him with such force. The male passenger tumbled down the pile of rubble very violently and died as he struck one of the rails, severing his spine. Some passengers screamed in horror as others rushed to his aid to only discover quickly that he could not be saved. No one knew what he saw and what frightened him to his death, except the mystery of what has happened and what could be on the other side waiting for them.

Henry Scott